"constructive criticism only" You're just asking to be called a faggot. Though it's not bad. I get what you're doing with making the color turn on at the most important part, but the beginning was way too dull. Try to add something more to the beginning.
That 12 year old comeback really shows the clearly superior position you are in Add that incorrect grammar and you've got a class A comeback that I'm sure will leave him wanting to commit seppuku